Can you write a child

This one is my kid story hope you like so far others have liked





The mouse and the big old ugly cat








There once was a mouse named Red and he lived in a house with a big ugly cat named Brat. Red was walking along the wall of the pale yellow house when he came along the big ugly cat while he was taking his daily walk to the pond to catch some little tiny fish.





Then out of the corner of the cat eye he saw the little mouse named Red he walked along hoping to trick Red to stay there but Red was already one step ahead of him. He had switched himself with a clone of himself while he made a run for his hole in the living room.





When Brat lunged himself to where the clone was all he did was hit a medal mouse and started to cry in pain but, he did have one advantage and that was that he had heard a snicker from behind the box that had once held his owners old baseball cap and ball. He smiled with all of his sharp teeth in a sinister way.





As he made his way to the box he heard his owner Mrs. Todd and her husband Mr. Todd walk in with his favorite food tuna flavored Kat nip. He ran towards the kitchen where they pulled out a bowl with his name on it. He licked his lip and started to chow down then he saw Red making his way to the hole , he chose quickly to finish and then catch the mouse but it was too late the mouse had already made his way to his hole and was tucked in by his mom named Tilly .





The mouse gently snoozed as the cat tried to figure out a way to get into the hole and get the little mouse that had been an annoyance for many year but he never seemed to get in and he is still trying today but has never come a 4th of an inch closer. Though it been 5 years since anyone seen Red the cat believes the old mouse is still in his hole taking care of his own little mice, wife , and shrived up mom who will soon die. And as for his dad his dad had died many year ago after he ate some bad cheese if you know what I mean .



I'm sorry, but I didn't like it. It doesn't seem like a great children's story to me. Unfortunately, I am not a writer myself, so I have no story to write for you.